• Late2TheParty@lemmy.world
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    8 months ago

    I wonder if word order could make this more better. Like, as it is now, the sentence reads the stepmom was using a Stetson hat to step on her stepson. Maybe instead, stepmom with Stetson steps on stepson. Or, stepmom steps on stepson’s Stetson with stilettos.